Writing 101: day 9 – The Joke

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Man

It’d been another long week, I was tired and fed up

Of going to work and coming home in the dark

So enough was enough, I took a half day

Perfect weather for a walk in the park

Woman

Strangely enough I was thinking the same

And, still smirking a bit at the joke

I said I would meet him at the end of the road

It would be good, I thought, for the bloke

Man

Hand in hand as we wandered the leafy green

She said she’d heard a great joke earlier on

Said I could do with some cheering up

Asked her to tell it as we ambled along

Woman

He smiled at first and then chuckled a bit

And soon he was laughing out loud

And I smiled along with him despite all the looks

We were getting from a gathering crowd

Old woman

I could hear laughter from somewhere

Getting closer, I thought, as I purled and knitted away

Must finish this jumper for little Tom

A gift for his special birthday

Man

I don’t know what it was that tickled me so

But I had the giggles so much that it hurt

And catching it seemed because even though

It was she who had told me, she smirked

Woman

We were approaching an old lady on a bench on the path

Who was knitting something right there

But when he glanced up in his mirth and saw what it was

His giggles turned to tears of despair

Old woman

I could see the man laughing, he seemed happy, I thought

But as the couple approached all that changed

For his laughs turned to tears as he glanced at me

“My goodness” I thought, “He’s deranged”

Man

It was the little red jumper that was the final straw

That’s when the tears of mirth came

This really had been the most perfect release

We must do this and come here again.

 

©Jemverse (12 June 2014)

 

5 Comments (+add yours?)

  1. Abby Boid
    Jun 12, 2014 @ 19:55:58

    Love it! very clever, and something about the pace and the rhythm had me smiling all the way through!

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  2. Jem Croucher
    Jun 12, 2014 @ 20:04:06

    Thanks Abby. Very kind.

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  3. Claudette
    Jun 12, 2014 @ 22:08:54

    Really enjoyed how this went to and fro. Rhythm was excellent also. Great response to the prompt.

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  4. jensiper
    Jun 13, 2014 @ 10:39:02

    It was kind of like the night before christmas. the rhythm. fun to read.

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  5. scottishmomus
    Jul 06, 2014 @ 21:10:29

    I want to know why he’s crying! My mind’s spinning through so many possibilities and none of them are probably right. I like this very much. The style you’ve used is easy to relate to but telling in that we get so many glimpses of the whole from different perspectives. I am intrigued to know just why his tears were triggered but I also like that I get to imagine my own reasons and subsequent scenarios. Very nicely done.

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